Random rants from a random rambling soul

Another week of lesson had gone by.Thus another reflection has to be up:D

Let me recall what we had done for the week. First of all there was no lectures but i think everyone can tell since there are no lecture notes up.

Anyway,Ryan decided to pair us up. We each had to read our partner’s openers and choose one that we liked best/could work with and come up with a story.

I had Jordan as my partner and from all of his openers i choose the following:

1) The photographer drops his camera and dashes into the building, towards the screams without giving a second thought about his job.

p.s i edited it a little,fine one word then, because it wasn’t in present tense.

This was the story that i could come up with in the stringent 15 mintues allocated to us.

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My Wonderful Story

The photographer drops his camera and dashes into the building, towards the screams without giving a second thought about his job.

Time is essence yet his mind and body is locked in mortal combat-his mind begging him to leave while his body gets ready for a possible fight. The screams are raising an octave with every step he takes. The agony in those screams lacerates his heart and affects him to the bottom of his very soul.

Stealthily he makes his way into the long corridor unaware, what to expect but knowing he has to help the person.

Adrenaline rushes through his veins as he reaches the corridor and sees a decomposing wooden door with thick green vines coiled around it. With pure determination he yanks the door open. A bright luminous light envelops him, searing his eyes.

A silhouette of a body shrieks and begs him to take it with him. Without any thought he carries the body and walks out of the door, never questioning one bit why everything seemed to posses a dream-like quality.

As he walks out of the door, his heart rate accelerates just for a moment and he takes a breath of fresh air and welcomes himself into the new world.

Randall finally wakes up from his coma of six years.
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I liked what i manged to come up with in that short amount of time.

Writing that story brought me back to my secondary school days where we have to rush and write a decent composition under an hour. I was actually happy writing it as i love descriptive writing. However i realised fromt he feedback that i got that this is slightly different from screenwriting.

In screenwriting visual imagery is more important.Thus words used to vivdly describe the actions/emotions would be preferred as after all it is meant to be acted out and filmed.

One example given to me was for the following sentence:

Time is essence yet his mind and body is locked in mortal combat-his mind begging him to leave while his body gets ready for a possible fight.– I was told to edit it to something like perhaps,

he stood at the doorway looking both sides wth sweat dripping down his forehead contemplating which way to go

This would show the hesitance and fear he had while trying to make a decision.

That example helped me understand it better. Another tip to add to the collection.

Next we moved on to talking about who would own the story.Would it be the person who wrote the opener or the person who completed it. It was quite a heated discussion i must say.I agree with Ryan, that the latter would be the real author who deserves the credit first. I mean anyway can start a story but finishing it is another thing.Besides the former had only sparked the idea. Like who ever came up with ” ONCE A UPON A TIME…”

After the “debate”, we were given homework to do.That would be the five 50 word stories.Not a word more.Not a word less. This is a tough and yet interesting assignment i must say.The word counting part especially.I keep forgetting where i left off.

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We ended off the lesson with talking about and preparing a presentation on a greek philosopher named “Aristotle”. This fellow is the one who had came up with somewhat like a set of official rules for storytelling. He also wrote a book called Poetics in which as scriptwriters and storytellers we can learn alot from.

Overall the lesson was pretty much interesting and entertaining as nobody slept.=X

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